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A black winged bird sat atop a roof,
Nonchalantly humming its caws and coos.
For there on the street – down yonder it peered,
At the coming of jeers; the walking of fear.

It saluted its foe and hopped to and fro,
Unaware that behind the mask was a heart of gold.
But the blood stained cheeks and pale white hands
Reached out for the bird, thus it succumbed to their demands.

Feathers flew in the wind from the night time air,
A whirlwind of darkness – only the night could compare;
The bird found a place where it could perch and respite,
On the shoulder of a corpse – oh, what a delight!

A chuckle from a mouth that the heavens forbade,
Gave room for the next few words that were said:
"Blackbird, blackbird! Why have you come?
In this unruly hour the night will be undone!
The children on the street are marching one by one,
To innocent to know that a nightmare has begun."

He clasped his hands when he finished his speech,
His shoulders were shaking in delicious relief –
Twitching away until he found his grave,
And he collapsed into the space the world had saved.

A black winged bird sat atop his tombstone,
Nonchalantly whispering its miserable moans.
For in the dirt – down yonder it gazed,
At the child of death; so startlingly amazed that,
The night time sky wrapped away his appearance,
Replacing the horror with a yearly romance.
For the contest in the group #JustKeepWriting

Enjoy my fairytale <3
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LadyMortimus Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Student General Artist
This is amazing! Wonderful job. It flows so nicely, I just couldn't stop reading it.
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alxplaysguitar Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :]
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smokedragon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
The pictures you paint with your words, and the story you convey, are both fantastic!
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:iconalxplaysguitar:
alxplaysguitar Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you ^.^
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nhavie Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Mmm, sorry to spam, but I just read it again and can't get over how much I love it! Just thought you should know how amazing of a writer you are. =3
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alxplaysguitar Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :]
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nhavie Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Oh, this is such a delight to read! I love when little stories are in poems. They always have a personal message from the author if you review it well, and you've weaved a wonderful tale here, and very nice form. I've been highly entertained by your delicious work here! ^_^

I do agree with Methemac a little though, there's a few small instances of beat loss for a second, but it's really not too noticeable. Also, in the last line of the verse " A chuckle from a mouth..", I believe the first to in that sentence should be too. Not sure if that was intentional or not,
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3rddemonbro Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
seems like edgar allen poes poem the raven
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alxplaysguitar Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
So i've been told :S
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3rddemonbro Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
its still a great poem
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